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Wednesday, May 1, 2013

ACCIDENTS for The Writer's Voice

Looks like I made it past the raffle stage of The Writer's Voice! Good luck to my fellow entrants. Here's the query and first 250 words for ACCIDENTS.

Artemis Masters always expected her sire would return for her, though he left before she'd even stopped bleeding. He wants her, forever, never mind that she's seventeen and thinks he's a certifiable lunatic. It's been a year of nightmares and sickening daylight since Genesis forced his blood on her. She has coped and pretended and re-built a life. She won’t just roll over, hopeless as it is to fight a man who holds his strength, her fear, and their bloodline over her like the sword of Damocles.

Artemis clings to her home, her last bit of normalcy – stirring up a bloody fight between her sister and her best friend under the pressures of the last year – until Genesis recaptures her. He expects she'll play house with the family he has created: a collection of eerily loyal vampire "daughters." Though she escapes to Japan, he's still her sire. He will keep coming back. Artemis sees no point in a life of constantly looking over her shoulder.

Her one chance is a Jinni, a trapped spirit powerful enough to erase Genesis from her blood. With monsters, vampires, and a legion of demons cat-fighting over the spirit, chasing wishes might get Artemis killed before she can turn human again.

ACCIDENTS is a complete YA urban fantasy at 75,000 words. It is a stand-alone novel with series potential.

Chapter 1

~Artemis~

I spent the eve of my anniversary freezing my butt off on a playground. Before I'd even put on my pajamas I knew I wasn't going to bed. I'd been restless all year; I didn't know if it was not needing as much sleep or just not wanting it. This ache in the lining of my stomach said I hadn't drunk in too long, and usually the ache meant I was safe from the nightmares. I really didn't feel safe from anything that night. Maybe that makes it stupid of me to leave home, where at least my family and walls surrounded me. I guess it was less stressful or more natural to be afraid out under the dark than in my house. The nightmares were enough without feeling scared of my own bedroom when I was awake.

If I wasn't going to sleep, I at least should have gone for some blood. Can't run on empty forever. But that's what a good, sensible vampire would do. I was not good at being a vampire. It should have been a relief but most of the time it was just pathetic. I probably wouldn't have been so bad if I practiced, but I wasn't good at practicing either. Too bad I couldn't drop vampirism like I did guitar lessons.

The sun called in a sick day, leaving dawn a sad affair. Blocked by thick-walled towers of cloud, her efforts to claw through were dull, gray, and noiseless.

24 comments:

  1. Ooh, I'm not usually one for vampires, but I like your take on this! What a lovely voice!

    Good luck!

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    1. Thank you! Just what everyone writing vampires right now wants to here.

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  2. You seem to have a unique take on vampires. Adding djinn probably makes for an interesting twist. Good luck with the contest!

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    1. Thank you! Good luck right back -- gotta love a psych thriller.

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  3. I agree with Natalie. Vampires really need to be different to stand out and this definitely does. I was completely sold when I read we were going to Japan.

    Good luck!

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    1. Thanks! Hey, I gotta use these college Japanese classes for something. Good luck to you, too!

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  4. I'll agree with the above - I am not one for vampires, never really was, but this is the first one that has peeked my interest.

    Great pitch and you have a very addictive voice.

    Good luck!

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    1. Thank you! I'm eternally a fan of vampires, but character is always more important than creature anyway.

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  5. I am also not a big vampire fan, but can be enticed into a story if the characters and plot pull me in (Justin Cronin's novels for example). My interest here is peaked. Good luck.

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    1. Oh, I've not read Justin Cronin. The Passage, right? Looks interesting. Thank you!

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  6. I like the take on vampires here. Artemis sounds very interesting. :) Good luck .:)

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  7. Waving from the contest linky list. Love the line, "The sun called in a sick day..." Best of luck in the contest.

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    1. Thank you -- always did like that part, despite that no-talking-about-the-weather rule. Good luck yourself!

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  8. This really puts a twist on vamps and paranormal. and the voice is great! Best wishes!

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    1. I do love some twisted vamps. Thank you so much, and good luck with PRETEND!

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  9. I do like vampires and werewolves and zombies and the rest of the paranormal gang. This one looks interesting! Good luck!

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    1. Thank you! Always nice to know that some are still up for paranormal. I think once people felt the genre had been saturated, it became a once bitten, twice shy thing. But vampires are immortal, after all.

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  10. I love monsters that are no good at being monsters! Ahh, you grabbed my heart with that. And do I smell a whiff of nekomata? I love me some Japanese myth! Lots of cool stuff going on here, I dig. Hoping this goes far!

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    1. Ah, no nekomata this time (though I will be filing that away for later). Kappa! Because they have that eating-people thing going on. Thanks so much! Good luck to you, too -- love the title.

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  11. Great villain. I'd be terrified if I were your MC. Good job and good luck.

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    1. Thank you! He's a real piece of work. I even had a nightmare about him when I was working on the book a few years ago.

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