Looks like I made it past the raffle stage of The Writer's Voice! Good luck to my fellow entrants. Here's the query and first 250 words for ACCIDENTS.
Artemis Masters
always expected her sire would return for her, though he left before
she'd even stopped bleeding. He wants her, forever, never mind that
she's seventeen and thinks he's a certifiable lunatic. It's been a
year of nightmares and sickening daylight since Genesis forced his
blood on her. She has coped and pretended and re-built a life. She
won’t just roll over, hopeless as it is to fight a man who holds
his strength, her fear, and their bloodline over her like the sword
of Damocles.
Artemis clings to
her home, her last bit of normalcy – stirring up a bloody fight
between her sister and her best friend under the pressures of the
last year – until Genesis recaptures her. He expects she'll play
house with the family he has created: a collection of eerily loyal
vampire "daughters." Though she escapes to Japan, he's
still her sire. He will keep coming back. Artemis sees no point in a
life of constantly looking over her shoulder.
Her one chance is a
Jinni, a trapped spirit powerful enough to erase Genesis from her
blood. With monsters, vampires, and a legion of demons cat-fighting
over the spirit, chasing wishes might get Artemis killed before she
can turn human again.
ACCIDENTS is a
complete YA urban fantasy at 75,000 words. It is a stand-alone novel
with series potential.
Chapter 1
~Artemis~
I spent the eve of
my anniversary freezing my butt off on a playground. Before I'd even
put on my pajamas I knew I wasn't going to bed. I'd been restless all
year; I didn't know if it was not needing as much sleep or just not
wanting it. This ache in the lining of my stomach said I hadn't drunk
in too long, and usually the ache meant I was safe from the
nightmares. I really didn't feel safe from anything that night. Maybe
that makes it stupid of me to leave home, where at least my family
and walls surrounded me. I guess it was less stressful or more
natural to be afraid out under the dark than in my house. The
nightmares were enough without feeling scared of my own bedroom when
I was awake.
If I wasn't going to
sleep, I at least should have gone for some blood. Can't run on empty
forever. But that's what a good, sensible vampire would do. I was not
good at being a vampire. It should have been a relief but most of the
time it was just pathetic. I probably wouldn't have been so bad if I
practiced, but I wasn't good at practicing either. Too bad I couldn't
drop vampirism like I did guitar lessons.
The sun called in a
sick day, leaving dawn a sad affair. Blocked by thick-walled towers
of cloud, her efforts to claw through were dull, gray, and noiseless.
Ooh, I'm not usually one for vampires, but I like your take on this! What a lovely voice!
ReplyDeleteGood luck!
Thank you! Just what everyone writing vampires right now wants to here.
DeleteYou seem to have a unique take on vampires. Adding djinn probably makes for an interesting twist. Good luck with the contest!
ReplyDeleteThank you! Good luck right back -- gotta love a psych thriller.
DeleteI agree with Natalie. Vampires really need to be different to stand out and this definitely does. I was completely sold when I read we were going to Japan.
ReplyDeleteGood luck!
Thanks! Hey, I gotta use these college Japanese classes for something. Good luck to you, too!
DeleteI'll agree with the above - I am not one for vampires, never really was, but this is the first one that has peeked my interest.
ReplyDeleteGreat pitch and you have a very addictive voice.
Good luck!
Thank you! I'm eternally a fan of vampires, but character is always more important than creature anyway.
DeleteI am also not a big vampire fan, but can be enticed into a story if the characters and plot pull me in (Justin Cronin's novels for example). My interest here is peaked. Good luck.
ReplyDeleteOh, I've not read Justin Cronin. The Passage, right? Looks interesting. Thank you!
DeleteI like the take on vampires here. Artemis sounds very interesting. :) Good luck .:)
ReplyDeleteThanks, good luck to you, too!
DeleteWaving from the contest linky list. Love the line, "The sun called in a sick day..." Best of luck in the contest.
ReplyDeleteThank you -- always did like that part, despite that no-talking-about-the-weather rule. Good luck yourself!
DeleteThis really puts a twist on vamps and paranormal. and the voice is great! Best wishes!
ReplyDeleteI do love some twisted vamps. Thank you so much, and good luck with PRETEND!
DeleteI do like vampires and werewolves and zombies and the rest of the paranormal gang. This one looks interesting! Good luck!
ReplyDeleteThank you! Always nice to know that some are still up for paranormal. I think once people felt the genre had been saturated, it became a once bitten, twice shy thing. But vampires are immortal, after all.
DeleteSounds great! Good luck :)
ReplyDeleteThank you! Good luck to you as well.
DeleteI love monsters that are no good at being monsters! Ahh, you grabbed my heart with that. And do I smell a whiff of nekomata? I love me some Japanese myth! Lots of cool stuff going on here, I dig. Hoping this goes far!
ReplyDeleteAh, no nekomata this time (though I will be filing that away for later). Kappa! Because they have that eating-people thing going on. Thanks so much! Good luck to you, too -- love the title.
DeleteGreat villain. I'd be terrified if I were your MC. Good job and good luck.
ReplyDeleteThank you! He's a real piece of work. I even had a nightmare about him when I was working on the book a few years ago.
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